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A good story most of the times has a good ending! I like it, but I think it's a bit boring... I mean there should be more adventures, the cat China had to think up some other tricks to make Bongo's life miserable, not just to HSSS him out of the house but let him live with her, there should be a house elf or ghost in the house who could help both the animals to get together facing a common danger, etc...
Can I also make a suggestion: Do you use sites like zazzle.com, cafepress. com, fiverr? They could be a good way to promote your works and to help "remove" stupidity in the streets like headlines on t-shirts, fridge-magnets, cups, etc: My Boyfriend kisses Better Than Yours, FBI - female body inspector, etc. Not everything we see and think of should be about sex, right? It would be much better if there were more nice pictures (even of mythical creatures), good thoughts, poems (from any genre are welcome I guess), etc? I'm allanbard there, I use some of my illustrations, thoughts, poems from my books (like: One can fight money only with money, Even in the hottest fire there's a bit of water,
Love and happiness will be around,
as all the chains will disappear,
and Mountaineers will climb their mount
and there won't be any tear!
etc). Best wishes! Let the wonderful noise of the sea always sounds in your ears! (a greeting of my water dragons' hunters).
i think it was ok but it needs more to the story and it has typos
I love the story of Bongo,but why did you make the adults so mean.Plies tipe back. You`r Reader,Raul from Drexel MO.
Your story was perfect I loved it minus the typos;but it was the best ever.
Great story you should make the big woman into a man though. I liked the way you spelled Sara it is spelled just like my best friend!!
Where did you get your inspiration?
~Marissa Martin Drexel,Mo
i love this story Jillian Drexel,MO
your story was perfect i love it minus the typos; but it was the best ever.
my name is jacob martin i
am from drexel,MO i thank your story was awesome and i saw three typos bingo,himf and ge instead of get and where did u get your idea i think it was awesome again so mabe see u at the thing in march
i liked it. it was ok.
It was a great story, It was kind of confusing at first, though.
It was awesome that the dog had two names.
I did spot one typo (Himh).
Sent by Ryan Lopez, Tucson, AZ
-AMIR AYUBI
(the one below)
I enjoyed it truly. But some things didn't make sense. I like the ending and I felt a lot of emotions when the dog got bit. About my brother Ali's idea.. I explained to him that the word lucky was the topic and that even if the dog met hid dad again the dad wouldn't want him back! I'm not just saying this but I would buy it.
Its a nice story. You might use lucky too much. Also the dogs had nothing to do with not being lucky, maybe if they played with him and thy had to leave. Last is he should find his dad agaain.
Ali
I like it very much!
-- Susie from Idaho